Rough edit: Teacher reflections

Type of shots/ shooting:

• When looking through the rough edit it is apparent that most of the shots are not as smooth as they could be, especially with low angle movement shots. We could not use the tripod because it could not shrink to the low angle we needed it to for some of the low angle shots, so we found it very hard to keep the camera as still as possible within the shots we could not use the tripod. For example in shot one, when the camera slowly tracks up from a low angle to reveal Yssy looking at a picture of her sister. This shot is very shaky, so we need to  work on finding a way of propping the camera, or using a different tripod in order for the shot to be smoother.
• Throughout the sequence, we realised that using the titles in-between shots instead of within he shots meant we cut out a lot of continuity shots, of things like her reaching for the things we see her use. One thing we did cut out, which our teachers felt necessary to put back in is he reaching for the ring. One minute we see her put on lip-gloss, the next she has a ring in her hand.

Dialogue:

• As we also agreed, the dialogue appeared too un-realistic and very unnatural. We had to work on creating a dialogue that involved more of a natural interaction that would make more sense for the audience to follow, rather than a our dialogue which only really makes sense to people who know the story behind the film.

Props:

• The product name could be seen on our perfume bottle, we had to make sure the props we used contained no product placement.

Lighting:

• Some of our shots looked grainy, which was due to our lighting. We needed to focus on lighting both characters, in order for the shots to appear clear, even when the focus is on one of the characters.

Considering what shots to use

• We needed to consider the shots that were actually necessary. Within our sequence we used two different shots of Yssy using the perfume which displayed continuity. Our teachers suggested focusing on just one of these shots, the neck spray, as the wrist spray wasn't as necessary and would allow us to cut down on time and focus more on the artistic style of the spray.
• Our teachers pointed out the focus on meaning on each of the shots. One that they highlighted as establishing a point that had already been established was the locket shot. In this shot you see Yssy take out the photo of her sister within the locket and place it in the draw, but our teachers questioned if this was necessary as we have already seen Yssy look at a photo of her and her sister earlier and put it in the drawer. For this reason if we still wanted to include the locket shot we had to consider changing what would occur, e.g, her jus looking at it, or her putting it on.